Breath of Fresh Air

Finally I'm starting to feel the stress winding down. As you can see below, the initial draft of my short story is done. Previously, while encouraging criticism, I let it pass without focusing much on what was being said. At the time, I was determined to get something down before revising the minor details. Well, that is now over, and I can strongly consider any qualms that may be had in regards to this tale.

I would like to give thanks to Milton, who was the inspiration for this story. Yes, there was in fact a homeless guy who stole money from my wallet, and to answer the most popular question thus far... yes he did offer me a dollar at one point. The rest of the story is a bit of a mix between memories from the recent years, as well as view points that were developed between shots of Jack in the past few days.

This piece aside, I keep returning to the thought of my previous post. I'm still very much interested in trying my luck in this competition, and am now trying to invent a few ideas, before dedicating my time to one solid piece of writing.

Even before I learned of the competition, I published a post regarding an exercise done for class. A part of me remains passionate about the topic, since it has deep personal ties, however I would first like to take some time to come up with something fresh. In hopes of bringing people back to this blog, I'll say that I will take a week to brainstorm a few ideas and will publish them for more public criticism.

I think that about covers my thoughts up to now. My main focus at the moment is the short story. If you have the time, please glance over it and give me some feed back. Is there anything that darts out as unbelievable? Is there enough scene to the story, or would it be good to have more details? Review the dialog, and help me decide if it follows the mood.

Thanks in advance,
Mike S.