Story Review

I swear, I'm getting to it.

I just went through a class review of my short story (linked to at the right). I'm not sure how to take the reaction of the class. It seems that it was fairly quiet, but I did get some quality input regardless. Few of the things that I agree with a lot is that the story is sandwiched between scenes of the ex, which have decent descriptions and scene, where the middle parts are simply told. I'll definitely go back and try to put in some more meat and feeling into those middle pages.

Another comment was regarding the ending. Some have suggested that the character not return, but leave this "familiar" world behind and grow up. While I'm strongly considering this, I have to first finish figuring out exactly what I want the ending to suggest. I have some thoughts, but I'll keep those to myself for now.

Another thing I'm thinking of, and am pretty sure that I will try to do, is add more dialog. Perhaps, switching back and fourth between the girl and stories of Milton and the character's past may give it more of a flow, rather than having a large chunk of me simply TELLING the story.

So that is my project for the weekend. Perhaps Saturday I'll take the time to dish out a new revision of the story. At the same time, I have some ideas for short writes that I may try to put down on "paper", and I'm brainstorming about a new photo project... but that may wait until the summer time.

So that's a bit of an update. Check back in the next few days. Perhaps if I'm not too swamped with work and programming, I'll take the time to scribble something out before the weekend.